Honest feedback and criticism needed

[lorrirose]

Hello everyone.
I am a new writer to this site even though I have been writing for years. I would love for you to tell me exactly what you think of my writing and how I could improve it. Thank you.

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[lala]

i liked it very much but maybe a bit of 'show not tell' is needed, rather than tell the reader - i am thinking this.... show her doing things to get ready, hint at things, take the reader on her journey.

hope that's helpful and like i said i did enjoy it